Big-worded committee bloat is slipping in. Not knocking anyone's efforts!
Improvements should consist of removing and simplifying. I'm supposed to be working, but couldn't control myself:
Dear Electronic Frontier Foundation,
The Bitcoin community appreciates your efforts to protect freedom and to keep the Internet free of unnecessary regulatory intervention.
Bitcoin is a new open-source P2P cryptocurrency system, published under the MIT license.
There are several hundred enterprises and individuals in the Bitcoin community. Many have expressed their desire to donate to your foundation, with 700 Bitcoins pledged to date. We are certain that you will receive many more in individual donations if you will set up your own EFF Bitcoin node.
Warmest regards,
The Bitcoin community
They will look at the site, and get back to us if they have any questions about how to receive Bitcoins. I doubt they'll have any trouble.