How about now?

Though your example is making a distinction without a difference, something like that could easily be converted to something more Bitcoin script like... but the real differences I'm highlighting are things like avoiding mutable state, which-- among other benefits-- would absolutely preclude vulnerabilities like that re-entrancy race in the DAO, which is currently in the process of proving to the world that ethereum isn't the decentralized system it has claimed to be (so, in that sense, the error prone smart contracting programming model has done the world a service).