1. Aren't you
begging the question?
Summary
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The new protocol layers described in this document
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Will richly reward early adopters of the new protocol, in proportion to how successful it is.
Assumptions
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New protocol layers on top of the bitcoin protocol will increase bitcoin values, consolidate our message to the world, and concentrate our efforts, while still allowing individuals and groups to
issue new currencies with experimental new rules. The success of any experimental currency protocol layer will enhance the value and success of the foundational bitcoin protocol.
Hmmm. Maybe. I'm open to suggestions for rewording that.
Perhaps you could put the source for the paper (latex?) on github, and people can send pull requests?
Anyway I won't do it right now, too tired. Perhaps you, me, or someone else, will suggest better wording in the future.