Since majority of people here cannot afford to review other people post and give them suggestions so they can improved, the best way would always be start learning on our own way, I find it quite difficult especially that I know for a fact that I am not a good poster, but I tried my best to learn and improve. I think regardless if there are people who can give suggestions it is the attitude of a person towards improvement can help them to achieve their goals.
What you wrote is basically a generic shitpost of the kind I've seen thousands of times on bitcointalk. The fact that someone sent you 3 merit points for this makes me very suspicious--either the guy who sent it to you is an idiot who likes to waste merits, or there was an arrangement between the two of you. It's not that your English is horrible, because it isn't; it's the fact that the content of this post is just vapid, and it says to me that you're posting to either get paid or rank up, and not to contribute anything useful. I've read posts just like yours many, many times before. I'm really hoping the merit system eliminates the incentive for this crap.