My peer review:

Reword: However, it solves the problem of determining whose perspective the consensus record should be a reflection of differently
However, it solves the problem of determining whose perspective the consensus record should be a reflection of in a different manner
Reword: In lay-terms, that means that a person who has invested 10billion into mining infrastructure will be able to produce significantly more than 10 times as much hashing power as someone who has invested 1 billion
In lay-terms, that means that a person who has invested 10billion will be able to mine not 10 times more than a person who invested 1billion, but he will mine 100 or maybe even a 1000 times more
Spellcheck: Thus far, it surely seems as if I have been deifying NXT
defying
Spellcheck: it is not in their own interest to horde their own coins. With a little luck these individuals will realize that if they continue to horde their coins,
2x hoard

Do with it what you like. If you don't like it, no problem
Greets