It's our hope that once you have researched our community and technology, you will join the movement and help us spread the word about Nxt.
This draft is better, but that particular sentence sounds ridiculously immature.
"Yeah, Jenny, call the NBA, tell them I can't make it tonight, I am gonna, uhm... research this community and, uhm... technology and then I am gonna, uhm... join The Movement and start twitting about it like crazy. Maybe order some billboards for them."
Busy famous people like to know why they're being contacted and what we're hoping to get from them. This sentence shows that we want nothing more than his goodwill and perhaps a public endorsement. I.e. we aren't trying to get financial support from him, manipulate him, or call in favors at a later date. Maybe it could be reworded, but this message needs to be conveyed. I also wanted to indicate that we aren't naive enough to think he'll jump in without researching first. I'm sure he researches all his investments very carefully.
For anyone who's interested, I've updated my draft of the letter to Mark Cuban, replacing the sentence that so offended NxtChg with:
"We believe that if you are confident in the Nxt endeavor, others will follow your lead, thus furthering our goal of widespread adoption."
https://bitcointalk.org/index.php?topic=345619.msg4724934#msg4724934
Again, this is not something we should send until we have a well-tested full-featured client. When we're ready, I have some thoughts on how to reach him.