I think it needs to be explained more clearly about the steps that will be taken to realize the vision and mission of this project. It also needs to be explained about the allocation of funds collected. and it is also necessary to describe the roadmap and delevolpment of the project.
Nearly all of this is discussed in the whitepaper. Please take a read and let me know if you have any further questions:
https://avaifc.io/avai-whitepaper-en.pdf