Note: I am sorry for my some bad/pood English, Now I request that everyone help for everyone. Everyone Destroy some time so that others learn something good.
Buddy, you should take help in fit to talk forum. Ask Jackg or Jet Cash to review your post in that forum. Till then , write some simple sentences first, get it reviewed and gradually move to creation of complex sentences and paragraph.
Let me fix the quoted part for you.
Note: I am sorry for my poor English. I request everyone to help others. Everyone should donate some time for other's learning.