Hey man. I'm always up for anything - so I gave it a read and here's what I thought.

Explain it like I'm five years old: I'm neither a mathematician or a statistician. You need to fully explain what's happening with my funds, and provide me with a working in depth example - not the basic one you gave
You need to be unique: What differentiates you from the thousands of other projects that have tried the exact same thing and failed? If your answer begins with: "the only difference" then I'm out.
Whitepaper is far too short: What sort of poverty are you trying to alleviate? Anything in particular? The world is so full of nasty shit these days, just saying "poverty" isn't going to cut it
Why aren't you on Kickstarter? If you can adequately explain to your audience how you couldn't possibly copy this project and put it on kickstarter using real-world money then you're probably onto a winner. Why is crypto integral to this project?

I could think of a few more but I think these need addressing first!

Hope that helps