Don't judge a book by it's cover.
There is no book. There isn't even a cover. Just a wrinkly napkin with some words scribbled on it. You have no trade history here and you're asking people to trust you with money under the pretense of a loan collateral.
Had you mentioned escrow in your post, or at least in your "rebuttal", I'd be inclined to give you some benefit of the doubt but no such luck.