this is messy. said to be appropriate must be based on certain criteria and can also be accounted for. When viewed in terms of the layout of the writing, there are still corrections and we can revise it.
Where is the aesthetic beauty of your writing?
punctuation, contains paragraphs if they meet at least 3 periods. Include a statement and content, then follow the rules using a pattern (inductive or deductive). and I don't find it in your text. I want to ask who gave the eligibility of your text, maybe for the content of the text, (good) but, for writing it doesn't really fit the criteria.
First of all I'm Russian. That's why my English is not perfect, but understandable. The second thing is that we are not on grammar and punctuation checker website. We are discussing the value of bitcoin on
bitcointalk. So please avoid off topic posting. If you want to give advices regarding proper english writing skills open a new topic .