I like how the video quickly and subtly lets people know that it's not all green on the Bitcoin side. People will know from the very beginning that Bitcoin has gone through rough patches and very rough patches. So these newbies don't think it's something they can rich off of overnight.
I would have loved you to include the years of the dips and bulls in the video so newbies will know that they have to be patient because the period between the dip and the bull is not always short.
Maybe focusing about money oriented isn't really a good way to introduce BTC to newcomers, but your are intended to talk about the price, so I can't judge it.
I don't think you can talk about Bitcoin to newcomers and not talk about money. You have to compare it to Fiat currencies and you also have to talk about Bitcoin as money because that's exactly what it is; a currency. Bitcoin is money so talking about Bitcoin is talking about money.