To me that is not what you should be telling someone you want to convince to invest in bitcoin,you start by telling them how bitcoin came about,a breaf history of bitcoin,the person who created bitcoin,countries or nations that have adopted bitcoin as their alternative currency.
What are you saying, are you trying to bored the person that you're introducing to Bitcoin. We're leaving in a time when people don't have time for too much explanation. Anything that the person needs is right there on the interest so giving him the basics is enough for him to invest or decide not to invest.
When the person get home, they can do further research. Don't try to convince anyone to invest in Bitcoin. Allow them to convince themselves and not you forcing it on anyone. Them no suppose tell person to do good thing wey go give am money. Bitcoin dey everywhere so why you go still need convince the person again abi una go share from the profits wey the person they make? Explaining in the simplest way is more better and less time consuming then all you're saying.