Ok,

Here's the most recent revision.  It's speaking more from a money-saving perspective.  But, from a societal perspective, it still has a brief call to action at the end:
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1Q6WiJPvmx3FCwgSRAcie9-Ay3Pz54GUhlfTXtVlZDFE/edit?usp=sharing

It's still a work in progress, so please comment and post suggestions if you have any ideas.  It's open to criticism ...just make sure it's constructive!


Thanks again to everyone who's helped out!